David Wong Posted September 14, 2012 at 01:27 PM Report Share Posted September 14, 2012 at 01:27 PM 请大家多多评论，谢谢。 心儿悲伤找谁说 伴侣居然最伤人 悲哀日子不好过 阴里摇动弄起舞 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
anonymoose Posted September 14, 2012 at 01:35 PM Report Share Posted September 14, 2012 at 01:35 PM 诗圣一枚。 鉴定完毕。 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hofmann Posted September 14, 2012 at 05:14 PM Report Share Posted September 14, 2012 at 05:14 PM 我好像記得詩聖是杜甫。 至於詩，你就繼續玩兒把。很高興發現你對詩詞有興趣。 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
New Members Nicolas Li Posted September 16, 2012 at 06:48 AM New Members Report Share Posted September 16, 2012 at 06:48 AM "阴里摇动弄起舞"这句话是什么意思啊？没看懂。。。lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xiaocai Posted September 18, 2012 at 11:03 AM Report Share Posted September 18, 2012 at 11:03 AM 平仄都无所谓啦，如果能比较押韵一点的话也算不错。 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Wong Posted September 18, 2012 at 08:40 PM Author Report Share Posted September 18, 2012 at 08:40 PM @Nicholas, 别人也问了这个问题。我是想描述在黑暗里找到了一种乐观的感觉。我描述了不好吧。后面我又把它换了成为： 心儿悲伤找谁说 伴侣居然最伤人 悲哀日子不好过 只好冥冥在哭泣 泪似黑夜的雨滴 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hofmann Posted September 19, 2012 at 07:17 PM Report Share Posted September 19, 2012 at 07:17 PM 通常偶數行後面有押韻。 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
New Members dahuang Posted September 21, 2012 at 08:27 AM New Members Report Share Posted September 21, 2012 at 08:27 AM 通俗易懂属于白居易一系的。同是天涯沦落人，相逢何必曾相识。哈哈哈 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crystal123 Posted September 24, 2012 at 10:27 AM Report Share Posted September 24, 2012 at 10:27 AM 你这属于打油诗 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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