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Sreeni

你曾经非常试厌一个人,认为他很既自私又冷漠。可是后来发生了一件事,改变了你对这个人的看法』试写出这件事的经过和你的感受。

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Sreeni

Got some help and come up as below. any sentence incorrect or can be improved?
 

以前我很讨厌约翰,因为我觉得他是一个自私的人。在我为我的中文(汉语)考试做准备时,因为我没有足够的作文素材,所以我向约翰寻求了帮助,但他并没有及时地给予我帮助,这让我觉得他是个自私的人。
但是,考试后,他不仅帮助我搜集作文素材,还向我介绍了最好用的词典,这对于我的写作而言大有裨益。后来,他把他的作文书送给了我,这本书帮助我产生了更多好的想法。在约翰的帮助下,我的写作技巧得到了提高。
事后我我才知道约翰那天很忙,所以没有给予我及时的帮助(如果你想要使用成语,可以说“他对于我的请求无动于衷”)。误会解释清楚后,我和约翰依旧是好朋友。

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EnergyReaper

Personally, I prefer to remove 而言 from 这对于我的写作而言大有裨益.

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Sreeni
On 2/20/2021 at 9:19 PM, EnergyReaper said:

 

Personally, I prefer to remove 而言 from 这对于我的写作而言大有裨益.

 


@EnergyReaperThanks. I am still learner. A teacher of great caliber helped me with the above Compo.
 

checked in Google translator for both of the words [with and without 而言] it means “This is of great benefit to my writing”


Pleco Meaning: 
而言 éryán with regard to (preceding phrase)

 

could you elaborate more on this, where 而言 should be used? 

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EnergyReaper

I didn't mean adding 而言 is wrong in your example. I just thought it's a bit wordy here and prefer the rhythm without 而言.

I think 而言 is often used in "对 someone 而言" structure and put at the beginning of a sentence. 

For her, books are as necessary to life as bread.

对她而言,书就像面包一样是生活的必需品

for me, writing is a kind of recall.

对我而言,写作是一种回忆

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