Outofin Posted January 24, 2006 at 04:47 PM Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 at 04:47 PM 诗三首 by Outofin 羚羊过山岗 山脉的上空是十里厚的铅色云障 耀眼的太阳在地平线上把这风雨前的世界照得通亮 踏着在风中颤抖的枯草 羚羊过了山岗 鲤鱼跃龙门 一条六十岁的鲤鱼 思量着今年是否要和儿孙们去跳龙门 老朋友们懒洋洋的说着闲话 “龙门的水流比往年来得急” 被新出生的孩子们簇拥着 老鱼游向河的上游 年月似这流水 怎么能让它白白的流过 一条六十岁的鲤鱼 摇摆着六十岁的鱼鳍 当他奋力地挣出水面 他看到去年夏天见过的蓝天 鲤鱼跃过了龙门 他们这样长大成人 玩具室的玩具整齐的摆放 孩子不知道今天会是哪一个陪自己玩 安静的坐在椅子上 妈妈，我不要一个人长大成人 书里可以认识很多朋友 街上有士兵和忽远忽近的枪声 在山坡上望着城市的平原 少年的胸中是忽远忽近的激情 工作后他过上了个像样的生活 但是悲伤总和伴随着酒精 每一次眼光撇过窗口 本该熟悉的街道显得陌生和狰狞 街上的每一个人都拖着一百米长的影子 偶尔抬头眼睛里映着太阳的光明 认识的每一个人都负着一百年的记忆 在还没有开口之前便已经浊泪满盈 玩具室的玩具整齐的摆放 妈妈，我不要一个人长大飘零 孩子，你要站在门口 和这世界作出一个约定 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
roddy Posted January 24, 2006 at 04:49 PM Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 at 04:49 PM You forgot to tell us a little bit about these poems, and why you chose to post these particular ones. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Outofin Posted January 24, 2006 at 04:53 PM Author Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 at 04:53 PM Why? Because I'm in the right mood of writing some poems. They're so freshly baked. And I though if I'm lucky, someones here probably will appreciate them. I can't explain it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
amego Posted January 24, 2006 at 05:04 PM Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 at 05:04 PM I like the 1st poem the most, short and sweet aka succinct. Keep it up! 我能够想象得到羚羊越过山岗的情景和那份清幽。=p Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xiaocai Posted January 24, 2006 at 05:14 PM Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 at 05:14 PM I'm not quite sure if I can understand your feeling... Just want ask that if the first one is related to this song by 朱哲琴, or you are inspired by it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Outofin Posted January 24, 2006 at 05:35 PM Author Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 at 05:35 PM Just want ask that if the first one is related to this song by 朱哲琴, or you are inspired by it? Exactly! The song inspired me. I'm glad that someones here know the song. I loved the title very much but the original lyric is so badly written and esstianally spoils the title. So I write my own. I believe mine is better than the original one, of course, according to myself. 何训友 is a great poet. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xiaocai Posted January 25, 2006 at 09:02 AM Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 at 09:02 AM I'm a fan of her... She really has an amazing voice and her performance is also very unique. But I seldom pay attention to the lyrics...... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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